ESPOSITOlorena

**13 March: a few final corrections. --Molly Rogers**
====// Twenty years ago, Howard-Yana Shapiro, an American man that today is 61 years old, established "Seeds for Change" a small firm which sold seeds for **organic** agriculture. The business was proceeding well and the firm grew. Then, on a ** [better: "one day"] ** day in 1997, an unexpected offer arrived: Mars, the colossal undertaking, well-known for **its** small chocolate bars, wanted to buy " Seeds for change". Even though his friends didn't want him to sell it, and they also called him a betrayer, Shapiro decided to sell his firm. Shapiro has worked for Mars since 1997 as "Global Director of plant science and external research". His friends didn't believe that Shapiro could do good on the inside of a colossal undertaking like Mars. On the contrary, Shapiro explains this decision of his this way: "If you're interested in protecting nature, the scale of your actions has a decisive importance". Shapiro's project is to make the food industry change its behaviour with respect to environmental protection. Today one can say that he has reached a first important result. Mars, the biggest firm in the world manufacturing chocolate, has announced that from now all of its cocoa production will follow the rules of the sustainable economy: minimum wage guaranteed for the farmers, biodiversity in the development of agriculture, preservation of water resources. This choice will be verified and certified by the ecology organization Rainforest Alliance. Shapiro says: "I'm convinced that, following the example of Mars, all the food industry will follow this idea ** [or: this path] ** ." //====

11 March 2011 Well done, Lorena. I have underlined and put into bold font some parts to be corrected. Twenty years ago, Howard-Yana Shapiro, an American man that today is 61 years old, established "Seeds for Change" a small firm which sold seeds for **__the__** biological **__agricolture__**. The business was proceeding well and the firm **__increased__**. Then, on a day in 1997, an unexpected offer arrived: Mars, the colossal undertaking, well-known for **__the chocolate small__** bars, wanted to buy " Seeds for change". Even though his friends didn't want him to sell it, and they also called him a betrayer, Shapiro decided to sell his firm. Shapiro has worked for Mars since 1997 as "Global Director of plant science and external research". His friends didn't believe that Shapiro could do good on the inside of a colossal undertaking like Mars. On the contrary, Shapiro explains this decision of his this way: "If you're interested in protecting nature, the scale of your actions has a decisive importance". Shapiro's project is to make the food industry change its behaviour with respect **__missing__** environmental protection. Today one can say that he has reached a first important result. Mars, the biggest firm in the world manufacturing chocolate, has announced that from now all of its cocoa production will follow the rules of the sustainable economy: minimum wage guaranteed for the farmers, biodiversity in the **__agricolture development__**, preservation of **__the__** water resources. This choice will be verified and certified by the ecology organization Rainforest Alliance. Shapiro says: "I'm convinced that, following **__Mars example__**, all the food industry will follow this **__way__**."
 * -- Molly Rogers **

MARS

Twenty years ago, Howard-Yana Shapiro, an American man that today is 61 years old, established "Seeds for Change" a small firm which sold seeds for the biological agricolture. The business was proceeding well and the firm increased. Then, on a day in 1997, an unexpected offer arrived: Mars, the colossal undertaking, well-known for the chocolate small bars, wanted to buy " Seeds for change". Even though his friends didn't want him to sell it, and they also called him a betrayer, Shapiro decided to sell his firm. Shapiro has worked for Mars since 1997 as "Global Director of plant science and external research". His friends didn't believe that Shapiro could do good on the inside of a colossal undertaking like Mars. On the contrary, Shapiro explains this decision of his this way: "If you're interested in protecting nature, the scale of your actions has a decisive importance". Shapiro's project is to make the food industry change its behaviour with respect environmental protection. Today one can say that he has reached a first important result. Mars, the biggest firm in the world manufacturing chocolate, has announced that from now all of its cocoa production will follow the rules of the sustainable economy: minimum wage guaranteed for the farmers, biodiversity in the agricolture development, preservation of the water resources. This choice will be verified and certified by the ecology organization Rainforest Alliance. Shapiro says: "I'm convinced that, following Mars example, all the food industry will follow this way."



CORPORATE GARDENS The Toyota’s office in Kentucky has a huge vegetable garden of tomatoes and zucchini. PepsiCo, the food colossus specialized in rubbish food like Mountain Dew, Cheetos and Rice-A-Roni has created on his inside a corporate garden, strictly biological and tilled by the employees. The American companies which can’t afford salary increases anymore to boost their employees’ morale have thought up a new benefit : company vegetable garden. Nobody thought that the Michelle Obama’s repeated appeals to persuade the country to eat foods which are healthier, biological and local would have so big results. In fact, until the last year the vegetable garden-mania involved only an elite of progressive companies like Google, Yahoo and Sunset Magazine. They were all from the Silicon Valley, where knowing how to make a tomato grown up is crucial like knowing how to programme a computer. But since several months, about a hundred American companies have been giving their employees the chance to be part-time farmers during the working hours. Who works for a company with a vegetable garden takes home Kilos of free vegetables, and can also taste the fruits of his own labour at the canteen. Tilling the land helps also the employees to keep themselves in good form. These are not the only advantages. Sheila Golden, PepsiCo’s senior manager and convinced “farmer”, says: “Hoeing the land together ,we want the employees to feel free from the company hierarchies at least for some hours. In the vegetable garden we’re all on the same level.”


 * This is not bad. I hope you can understand the mistakes that are underlined, and correct them. The annotation "missing" means that something is missing in your translation.**
 * Molly Rogers, 18-11-2010**

CORPORATE GARDENS __The__ Toyota’s office in Kentucky has a huge vegetable garden of tomatoes and zucchini. PepsiCo, the food colossus specialized in rubbish food like Mountain Dew, Cheetos and Rice-A-Roni has created __on his inside__ a corporate garden, strictly biological and tilled by the employees. The American companies which can’t afford salary increases anymore, to boost their employees’ morale have thought up a new benefit : __missing__ company vegetable garden.

Nobody thought that __the__ Michelle Obama’s repeated appeals to persuade the country to eat foods which are healthier, biological and local would have __so__ big results. In fact, until __the__ last year the vegetable garden-mania involved only an elite of progressive companies like Google, Yahoo and Sunset Magazine. They were all from the Silicon Valley, where knowing how to make a tomato __grown up__ is __missing__ crucial __like__ knowing how to programme a computer.

But __since__ several months, about a hundred American companies have been giving their employees the chance to be part-time farmers during the working hours. __Missing__ Who works for a company with a vegetable garden takes home Kilos of free vegetables, and can also taste the fruits of his __own__ labour at the canteen. Tilling the land helps also the employees to keep themselves in good __form__.

These are not the only advantages. Sheila Golden, __PepsiCo’s senior manager__ and convinced “farmer”, says: “Hoeing the land together ,we want the employees to feel free from the company hierarchies at least for some hours. In the vegetable garden we’re all on the same level.”