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 * I have underlined the words you should eliminate and added some words in bold font.**
 * -- Molly Rogers, 10 December 2010**

(7) __ANIMALS USED IN WARS__
====Gina, 2 years **old** and weighing 28 kilos, is a military dog in **the** American army, __specializing__ **specialized** in __researching__ **searching** for bombs and explosives. Before going to Iraq she was a happy and __quite__ **quiet** dog. No one could imagine that Gina would __have__ come back **[studiare: future in the past]** from the war psycologically disturb**ed**, but after the mission in Iraq she was terrified of everyone and everything. With her tail between her legs she would hide under the furniture. It was hard, for those who had known her before the mission to recognize her as the same dog. Six __mounths__ **months** of war, in __particulary__ **particular** the shelling of the convoy, on which she was travelling had transformed her. Gina has then started a therapy to cure the disorder that __vats__ **vets** call " post traumatic stress disorder". __In__ **At** the beginning of the therapy, Melinda Miller, her trainer, **only** wanted __only that__ Gina __went__ **to go [studiare: "volere che]** for long walks together Melinda and other friends.Fallowing that, they made her jump obstacles, gave her __something to do__ **some small tasks**, for example, finding hidden objects. In this therapy, which continues even today, at every success they pay a compliment to her. And above all they confort her every time she shows fear.==== ====For some __mounths__ **months** Gina has been much happier and much less frightned. She has begun to __recuperated__ **recuperate** some of her skills from the past. Experts say, however, she could never go back to the war zone. The case of Gina brings to **our** attention yet again __oon__ the question of **the** morality of using animals in war.====

CORPORATE GARDENS The Toyota’ s office in Kentucky has an enormous vegetable garden with tomatoes and marrows. PepsiCo.food industry specialized in junk food such as Mountain Dew, Cheetos and Rice-A-Roni has created internaly a corporate garden, strictly biological, cultivated by employees.To boot the employees moral, the american industry, which are not able to increase salaries have invented a new benefit: the company vegetable garden. No one could imagine that the repeated appeals by the first lady Michelle Obama to convince the country to eat healtier, biological and localy grow food would have had such a great results. Until last year, in fact, the vegetable gardens-mania involved only an elitè-group of progressive company like Google, Yahoo, Sunset Magazine. They were all from Silicon Valley, where Knowing how to grow a tomato is aas crucial as knowing how to program a computer. For some months, however,hundreds of american company give their employees the chance to be part-time farmers during working hours. Who works in company with vegetable gardens takes kilos of free vegetables at home, and can also taste the results of their work in the company’s canteen. Working in the fields also help the employees to keep fit. But these are not the only advantages, says Sheila Golden, PepsiCo’s senior manager and convinced farmer, “ we wanted our employees, while hoeing togheter, feel free at least for some hours from office hierarchy. In the garde we are all on the same level.

__The Toyota’ s office__ in Kentucky has an enormous vegetable garden with tomatoes and marrows. PepsiCo.__food industry__ specialized in junk food such as Mountain Dew, Cheetos and Rice-A-Roni has created __internaly__ a corporate garden, strictly __biological__, cultivated by employees.To __boot__ the __employees__ moral, the __american__ industry, which __are__ not able to increase salaries __insert comma__ have invented a new benefit: the company vegetable garden. No one could imagine that the repeated appeals by the first lady Michelle Obama to convince the country to eat __healtier__, __biological__ and __localy grow__ food would have had such __a__ great results. Until last year, in fact, the vegetable __gardens-mania__ involved only an elitè-group of progressive company like Google, Yahoo, Sunset Magazine. They were all from Silicon Valley, where Knowing how to grow a tomato is __aas__ crucial as knowing how to program a computer. For some months, however,hundreds of __american__ company __give__ their employees the chance to be part-time farmers during working hours. __Who__ works in __missing__ company with vegetable gardens takes kilos of free vegetables __at__ home, and can also taste the results of their work in the company’s canteen. Working in the fields also help the employees to keep fit. But these are not the only advantages, says Sheila Golden, PepsiCo’s senior manager and convinced farmer, “ we wanted our employees, while hoeing __togheter__, __missing__ feel free at least for some hours from office hierarchy. In the __garde__ we are all on the same level.
 * I have underlined the parts that need correction. The annotation "missing" means that something is missing.**
 * Molly 18-11-2010**

__Correction:__

Toyota' s main office in Kentucky has an enormous vegetable garden with tomatoes and marrows. PepsiCo. food coloussus specialized in junk food such as Mountain Dew, Cheetos and Rice-A-Roni has created a corporate garden in its structure, strictly organic, cultivated by employees. To boost the employees morale, American industry, which is not able to increase salaries, have invented a new benefit: the company vegetable garden. No one could imagine that the repeated appeals by the first lady Michelle Obama to convince the country to eat healty, organic and local food would have such great results. Until last year, in fact, the vegetable gardens-mania involved only an elité-group of progressive company like Google, Yahoo, Sunset Magazine. They were all from Silicon Valley, where knowing how to grow a tomato is as crucial as knowing how to program a computer. For some mounths, however, hundreds of American company have given to their employees the chance to be part-time farmers during working hours. People who works in a company with vegetable gardens takes kilos of free vegetables to home, and can also taste the results of their work in the comany's canteen. Working in the fields also help the employees to keep fit. But these are not the only advantages, says Sheila Golden, PepsiCo' s senior manager and convinced farmer," we wanted our employees, while hoeing together, they feel free, at least for some hours, from office hierarchy. In the garden we are all on the same level.

Twenty years ago, Howard Yana Shapiro, an American who today is 61 years old, founded “ Seeds for change”, a small company which sold seeds for organic farming. Business went good and the firm grew. Then, one day in 1997, an unexpected offer arrived: the Mars, the giant company known for the chocolate bars, wanted to buy “Seeds for Change”. Although his friends didn’t want he sold, and they called him even “ betrayer”, Shapiro decided to sell his company. Since 1997 Shapiro has worked at Mars, as “ Global Director of Plant Science and External Research”. His friends didn’t believe that Shapiro could do well inside of a giant company like the Mars’s. Instead, Shapiro explains this decision of his in this way: “ if you are interested in defending the nature, the scale of your actions has a crucial importance”. Shapiro’s plan is to make food industry change its behaviour in order to environment’s protection. Today it is possible to say he has had a first important result. The Mars, the biggest company cocoa maker in the world, announced that from now on all its cocoa’s production will follow the rules of sustainable economy: secured minimum wage for farmers, biodiversity in development of agriculture, conservation of water resources. This choice will be checked and certificated by the environmental organization Rainforest Alliance. Shapiro says, “ I am convinced that, following Mars’s example, all food industry will follow this path.”
 * 9 MARS**


 * a few more corrections – Molly 3 march 2011 **

Toyota' s main office in Kentucky has an enormous vegetable garden with tomatoes and marrows. PepsiCo. ** the ** food coloussus specialized in junk food such as Mountain Dew, Cheetos and Rice-A-Roni has created a corporate garden in its structure, strictly organic, cultivated by employees. To boost the employees **employees’** morale, American industry, which is not able to increase salaries, have **has** invented a new benefit: the company vegetable garden. No one could imagine that the repeated appeals by the first lady Michelle Obama to convince the country to eat healty **healthy**, organic and local food would have such great results. Until last year, in fact, the vegetable gardens-mania involved only an elité-group of progressive company like Google, Yahoo, Sunset Magazine. They were all from Silicon Valley, where knowing how to grow a tomato is as crucial as knowing how to program a computer. For some mounths **months**, however, hundreds of American company have given to their employees the chance to be part-time farmers during working hours. People who works **work** in a company with vegetable gardens takes **take** kilos of free vegetables **to** home, and can also taste the results of their work in the comany's **company’s** canteen. Working in the fields also help **helps** the employees to keep fit. But these are not the only advantages, says Sheila Golden, PepsiCo' s senior manager and convinced farmer," we wanted our employees, while hoeing together, they **to** feel free, at least for some hours, from office hierarchy. In the garden we are all on the same level.

** 9 MARS ** Twenty years ago, Howard Yana Shapiro, an American who today is 61 years old, founded “ Seeds for change”, a small company which sold seeds for organic farming. Business went **__good__** and the firm grew. Then, one day in 1997, an unexpected offer arrived: the Mars, the giant company known for the chocolate bars, wanted to buy “Seeds for Change”. Although his friends didn’t want **__he sold__**, and **__they called him even__** “ betrayer”, Shapiro decided to sell his company. Since 1997 Shapiro has worked at Mars, as “ Global Director of Plant Science and External Research”. His friends didn’t believe that Shapiro could do well inside of a giant company like **__the Mars’s__**. Instead, Shapiro explains this decision of his in this way: “ if you are interested in defending **__the__** nature, the scale of your actions has a crucial importance”. Shapiro’s plan is to make **__missing__** food industry change its behaviour **__in order to environment’s protection__**. Today it is possible to say he has had a first important result. The Mars, the biggest company cocoa maker in the world, announced that from now on all its **__cocoa’s__** production will follow the rules of sustainable economy: **__secured__** minimum wage for farmers, biodiversity in development of agriculture, conservation of water resources. This choice will be checked and **__certificated__** by the environmental organization Rainforest Alliance. Shapiro says, “ I am convinced that, following Mars’s example, all **__missing__** food industry will follow this path.”
 * 11 March 2011 I have underlined your mistakes and indicated them in bold. See if you can correct them. “Missing” means that something is missing in the text. **
 * -- Molly Rogers **

9) MARS Twenty years ago, Howard-Yana-Shapiro, an American who today is 61 years old, founded "Seeds for change", a small company which sold seeds for organic farming. Business were booming and the firm grew. Then, one day in 1997, an unexpected offer arrived: the Mars, the giant company known for the chocolate bars, wanted to buy "Seeds fo Change". Although his friends didn't want him to sell it, and they even called him "betrayer", Shapiro decided to sell his company. Since 1997 Shapiro has worked at Mars, as " Global Director of Plant Science and External Research". His friends didn't believe that Shapiro could do well inside of a giant company like the Mars. Instead, Shapiro explains this decision of his in this way:" if you are interested in defending nature, the scale of your actions has a crucial importance". Shapiro's plan is to make the food industry change its behaviour in regard to environment's protection. Today it is possible to say he has had a first important result. The Mars, the biggest company cocoa maker in the world, announced that from now on all its cocoa production will follow the rules of sustainable economy: guaranteed mimimun wage for farmers, biodiversity in development of agriculture, conservation of water resources. This choice will be checked and certified by the environmental organization Rainforest Alliance. Shapiro says, " I am convinced that, following Mars's example, all the food industry will follow this path".

12 March 2011. Well done. Just a few more corrections are included below. -- Molly Rogers 9) MARS Twenty years ago, Howard-Yana-Shapiro, an American who today is 61 years old, founded "Seeds for change", a small company which sold seeds for organic farming. Business were booming **went well** and the firm grew. Then, one day in 1997, an unexpected offer arrived: the Mars, the giant company known for the chocolate bars, wanted to buy "Seeds for Change". Although his friends didn't want him to sell it, and they even called him "betrayer", Shapiro decided to sell his company. Since 1997 Shapiro has worked at Mars, as " Global Director of Plant Science and External Research". His friends didn't believe that Shapiro could do well inside of a giant company like the Mars. Instead, Shapiro explains this decision of his in this way:" if you are interested in defending nature, the scale of your actions has a crucial importance". Shapiro's plan is to make the food industry change its behaviour in regard to environment's protection **the protection of the environment [oppure environmental protection]**. Today it is possible to say he has had a first important result. The Mars, the biggest company cocoa maker in the world, announced that from now on all its cocoa production will follow the rules of sustainable economy: guaranteed minimum wage for farmers, biodiversity in development of agriculture, conservation of water resources. This choice will be checked and certified by the environmental organization Rainforest Alliance. Shapiro says, " I am convinced that, following Mars's example, all the food industry will follow this path".

12 ) Call center

====The enterprises called "call center" have existed for many years, which sell all kinds of products by phone. One of these centers, the " Italcarone" of Incisa Valdarno has been shut by Financial Police recently.====

====The "Italcarone" hired people without specialization, who needed to earn. These young people were trained as telephone operators for selling a particular American vacuum cleaner. The new employees, a great many of them were girls, were spured to reach imposible results, promissing they would be remunerated, on addition to their salary, with prize such as travels in exotic resorts.====

====To make them work more, the girls received praises and gadgets when they sold some vacuum cleaner, but they were even whipped on the legs when the results weren't considered enough. Who worked in the morning couldn't stand up for going to the bath if they hadn't done any called with positive resutls yet.====

====At the beginning of every working day, thanks the national anthem, the girls were excited by managers, who even wanted the girls to hold their hand and to sing songs and slogan. The managers were proud of these management techniques of theirs, which in reality worked well, but only for the managers themselves. Indeed, they drived luxury cars and lived in amazing villas.====

The firm reached almost 4 million and half of sales illegaly before managers' arrest for commercial fraud and tax fiddle.
====The enterprises called "call __center__" have existed for many years, __which__ sell all kinds of products by phone. One of these centers, the " Italcarone" of Incisa Valdarno has been __shut__ by __missing__ Financial Police recently.====
 * I have underlined some words you should correct and indicated with "missing" where something is missing.**
 * -- Molly Rogers, 20 March 2011**

====The "Italcarone" hired people without specialization, who needed to earn __missing__. These young people were trained as telephone operators __for selling__ a particular American vacuum cleaner. The new employees, a great many of __them__ were girls, were __spured__ to reach imposible results, __promissing__ they would be remunerated, __on__ addition to their salary, with __prize__ such as __travels in__ exotic resorts.====

====To make them work more, the girls received praises and gadgets when they sold some vacuum __cleaner__, but they were even whipped on the legs when the results weren't considered __enough__. __Who__ worked in the morning couldn't stand up __for going__ to the bath if they hadn't done __any called__ with positive resutls yet.====

====At the beginning of every working day, __thanks__ the national anthem, the girls were __excited__ by __missing__ managers, who even wanted the girls to hold __their hand__ and to sing songs and __slogan__. The managers were proud of these management techniques of theirs, which in reality worked well, but only for the managers themselves. Indeed, they __drived__ luxury cars and lived in amazing villas.====

The firm reached almost 4 million and half of sales __illegaly__ before __missing__ managers' arrest for commercial fraud and tax __fiddle__.
Call center

====The enterprises called "call center" have existed for many years, which sell all kinds of products by phone. One of these centers, the " Italcarone" of Incisa Valdarno has been closed by the Financial Police recently.====

====The "Italcarone" hired people without specialization, who needed to earn money. These young people were trained as telephone operators for the sale of a particular American vacuum cleaner. The new employees, most of them girls, were encouraged to reach imposible results, with the promise they would be remunerated, in addition to their salary, with prizes such as trips to exotic resorts.====

====To make them work more, the girls received praises and gadgets when they sold some vacuum cleaner, but they were even whipped on the legs when the results weren't considered sufficient.People who worked in the morning couldn't stand up to go to the bath if they hadn't already made some calls with positive resutls yet.====

====At the beginning of every working day, with the national anthem, the girls were charged by the managers, who also wanted the girls to hold their hands and to sing songs and slogans. The managers were proud of these management techniques of theirs, which in reality worked well, but only for the managers themselves. Indeed, they drove luxury cars and lived in amazing villas.====

I tried to correct my mistakes, but I do not know if I do it well, some of them I can't see why. I am sorry.

 * Dear Maria Francesca,**
 * A very important part of learning anything is the process of making and correcting mistakes (and the same is true, more generally, for the process of acquiring knowledge in any field). There is no reason to apologize.**
 * The only people who are learning anything in this world are the people who are brave enough to try and brave enough to make mistakes.**
 * I have made the final corrections on your translation below.**
 * -- Molly Rogers, March 27, 2011**

==== The enterprises called "call __center__ ** centers ** " have existed for many years, which __sell__ ** selling/ and they sell ** all kinds of products by phone. One of these centers, the " Italcarone" of Incisa Valdarno has been closed by the Financial Police recently. ==== ==== The "Italcarone" hired people without specialization, who needed to earn money. These young people were trained as telephone operators for the sale of a particular American vacuum cleaner. The new employees, most of them girls, were encouraged to reach impossible results, with the promise they would be remunerated, in addition to their salary, with prizes such as trips to exotic resorts.  ====

==== To make them work more, the girls received praises and gadgets when they sold some vacuum __cleaner__ ** cleaners **, but they were even whipped on the legs when the results weren't considered sufficient. People who worked in the morning couldn't stand up to go to the bath ** room (toilet) ** if they hadn't already made some calls with positive results yet ** (use either “already” or “yet”, not both – they are in the correct positions, but you only need one of them) **. ====

==== At the beginning of every working day, with the national anthem, the girls were charged ** up ** by the managers, who also wanted the girls to hold ** their ** hands and to sing songs and slogans. The managers were proud of these management techniques of theirs, which in reality worked well, but only for the managers themselves. Indeed, they drove luxury cars and lived in amazing villas. ==== ==== The firm reached almost 4 __million and__ __hal__f ** (four and a half million) ** of sales illegally before the managers' arrest for commercial fraud and tax evasion. ====

13 ELEVATOR GHOST
==== Since March 2008 it has been possible to watch, on YouTube.com web site, about two minutes video, called “elevator ghost”. YouTube, for people who doesn’t know, is a web site which allows videos’ sharing among its users, and it is the forth site more visited in the world. ==== ==== In the video “elevator ghost” two employees come in an elevator. During the descent they chat away happily. They were shot by security cameras. After a couple of minutes they come out from the elevator, but behind them a scary shape appears : an old woman ghost. The video seems real, but it could be a hoax. Everybody wanted to know the origin of hte video and they asked why someone had created a product like this. ==== ==== Now there is an answer. The “the GMP Group”, a job recruitment agency from Singapore, claims to have produced the video. This small masterpiece of theirs has been created, they said, to make us reflect about the dangerous of “workaholism”, the disease of people, who works too much. They hoped that many people would watch the video, and would understand that they had to work less. Josh Goh, GMP’s manager, in a second video explains what the dangerous are: “ Stress, tiredness and healthy problem are only some of them. And, if you are really unlucky, you could also meet a ghost…I am joking !”. ====

**April 4, 2011-- I have made some corrections.**

 * -- Molly Rogers**

13 ELEVATOR GHOST
==== Since March 2008 it has been possible to watch, on **the** YouTube.com web site, **a video** about two minutes **long** video, called “elevator ghost”. YouTube, for people who **don't** doesn’t know, is a web site which allows videos’ **video** sharing among its users, and it is the forth site more **fourth most** visited **site [the fourth among the most visited sites]** in the world. ==== ==== In the video “elevator ghost” two employees come in an elevator. During the descent they chat away happily. They were shot **are filmed** by **the** security cameras. After a couple of minutes they come out from **of** the elevator, but behind them a scary shape appears : an old woman **woman's** ghost **[the ghost of an old woman]**. The video seems real, but it could be a hoax. Everybody wanted to know the origin of the video and they asked why someone had created a product like this. ==== ==== Now there is an answer. The “the GMP Group”, a job recruitment agency from Singapore, claims to have produced the video. This small masterpiece of theirs has been created, they said **say**, to make us reflect about the dangerous **dangers** of “workaholism”, the disease of people, who works **work** too much. They hoped that many people would watch the video, and would understand that they had to work less. Josh Goh, GMP’s manager, in a second video explains what the dangerous **dangers** are: “ Stress, tiredness and healthy **health** problem are only some of them. And, if you are really unlucky, you could also meet a ghost…I am joking !”. ====

But if the second video were a hoax ? Mystery of the web
=** 19) SUBWAY SUPERMAN **=
 * Here are some corrections. Be careful of "say" and "tell" (tell me... say that.../ tell that... say me ).**
 * May 7, 2011 -- Molly Rogers**

He is called **the** " subway superman", but he considers himself only a good citizen. But how many "good citizen**s**" would throw **themselves** down **on the** subway tracks to save the life to an other **of another** man ? Wesley Autrey did it in a station of **Harlem** Harimen, New York, before starting his work shift as bricklayer. Autrey is fifty years old, he is African-American and US Navy and Vietnam veteran. He has been living in New York since he was born. It was about 12.45, and Autrey was going with his two daughters, Syshe, 4 years old and Shuqui, 6 years old, to their home for lunch, as he does every before going to work. While he was waiting for the subway, a man in front of him fell down, having **an** unexpected fit. The man, Cameron Hollopeter, twenty years old, tried to get up again, but he fell down again, in the middle of the tracks. From far away it could see the lights of the number 1 train, which was arriving**, could be seen**. " I had to take a quick decision"**said** told Autrey. " I didn't know what ** it **would happen really, but I had to try to save him". He threw **himself** on the man, he covered him with his body, and he pushed the man's head down- and he lowered his **own**- while the train arrived at a high speed. Autrey, from under the train, heard the sound of the brakes, and he felt five carriages over his head, before the subway could stop. " We are fine, we are under here", he shouted, when the train stopped. But the first worry **was** were his daughters. " I have got two daughters up there, **tell** say them I am fine, their dad is ok ! " People in charge of the subway pulled the two men out, and Hollopeter was ** being **taken at St Luke's-Roosevelt Hospital Center. Autrey refused to **let** make the doctors **examine** visit him. " I didn't have anything that **made** makes me feel bad " he said. The day after, he went to visit the boy at the hospital. " I don't believe that I did something special- he explained to the jounalists- I only saw someone who needed help. I did the right thing".